Onus of the oath – Part 6


Read the rest of the story here – Part 1 | Part 2 | Part 3 | Part 4 | Part 5 | Part 6


In the six months that followed, Ravi was completely distraught at what had happened. Dr Tharakan took up the role of a friend, philosopher and guide to him and helped him overcome his distress and guilt. He was reminded that the most fitting tribute to his father’s memories would be to become the best doctor that he could.

In this time Ravi had settled down almost permanently in Kumli and was doing his best to help out all the patients who turned up at the Nightingale Medical Center there. Coupled with his new found love for his profession and his flair for being a quick learner, he was soon among the most loved doctors in the entire region and commanded respect from all the people.

It was a day like any other when little Preethi, a ten year old girl was brought into the hospital with severe breathing problems. Since Dr Tharakan had gone on a house visit, Ravi conducted the preliminary diagnosis. The girl’s mother informed him that she had a respiratory problem and had frequent attacks of breathlessness. However today’s was an especially serious one and she had been having violent spasms for the past hour or so, all the way to the hospital.

Just about when Ravi had completed his diagnosis, her father rushed into the doctor’s chamber. Even before Ravi or anybody else could react to the sudden intrusion, he had fallen at his feet and started pleading with him to do whatever was required to save his daughter. A bulky man in a policeman’s uniform falling at a masked doctor’s feet was something that you didn’t see every day.

When Ravi looked down at his feet and saw the weeping man there, he was taken back in time.

Slowly removing his surgical mask, he recollected the last time he had seen this particular face; on a rainy day six months ago when he was driving to Kochi on an extremely rainy and wet day. The last time he had seen Bhaskaran was that fateful day his father died.

And today, Bhaskaran was at his mercy, begging him to save his daughter.

How the tables had turned.

As soon as the surgical mask came off, Bhaskaran recognized Ravi and remembered the incident six months ago. He immediately apologized to Ravi and asked him to let bygones be bygones and to help Preethi recover from her spasms. He pleaded with the doctor not to take revenge, not today.

Without saying a word Ravi walked out of the room and into his chambers and shut the door behind him. From where he sat on his chair, the oath he had taken as a doctor loomed large on him, the words he knew so well haunted him.

He had to make a choice.




Read the rest of the story here – Part 1 | Part 2 | Part 3 | Part 4 | Part 5 | Part 6

Disclaimer: This novella is based on a popular movie, the name of which I am not going to disclose here. I have taken a couple of the plot elements from the movie, modified them, added some background of my own and penned down this novella. Advance apologies for any fans of the movie who might be reading this novella, the intention was not to dilute the movie in any form or fashion, but to reinterpret some plot points using my imagination.

31 thoughts on “Onus of the oath – Part 6

  1. Right, where do I start. In your own words “Given that” I already know which movie you were talking about, and hence know exactly the twists you have incorporated, I must say, you deserve more than a pat on the back for this. I enjoyed it. Also because I managed to read it in one go today. So, if I had to sum it up in a phrase, I’d say ” The writers and the director of the movie would be proud!” More detailed feedback on PM

    • @Sid, yes, given that you know the movie that I am talking about, you have been extremely kind when saying that I deserve more than a pat on the back for this. Although it was quite a struggle not to incorporate the romantic angle that was in the movie to develop the conflict between the characters, I tried, looks like it worked out decently enough. Thanks for the feedback Sid.

  2. Given that 🙂 I don’t know which film has inspired this story, I’m enjoying the twists, particularly this one. I’ve also liked the way you end each instalment with the beginning of a twist!

  3. Okay, am hoping he ended up saving the girl…please dont tell me the story stops here..or did I miss something…I loved the way you wrote the story…you sure have a way with words 🙂

    • @R’s Mom, the ending is left open ended deliberately. Although I might just end up writing an epilogue to the story sometime later on. Just want the readers to ponder over Ravi’s situation and understand his mental conflict at this point in time 🙂

      And thank you so much for the kind words regarding my writing style 🙂

  4. Ok I still don’t know which movie you guys are talking about 😦 Is this some South Indian movie??
    Loved the way you concluded the story but a question lingers in my mind.. As a doctor, should Ravi (or anyone) even think that he has a choice? Isn’t his first duty towards the patient? And in this case a patient who really has nothing to do with what happened to him.. so why victimize her for what her father had done?

    • @Seeta, the movie is a Malayalam one 🙂

      The question you asked is precisely the question that I want readers to ponder over. Yes, while his duties as a doctor dictate that he treat the little girl, the fact remains that the girl’s father was the only reason that Ravi couldn’t reconcile with his father forever. Think about it.

      • Still.. its the girl’s father he has a problem with and not the girl.. why should she face the brunt of that?

      • @Seeta, true, but his good sense is clouded by his anger at Bhaskaran being the only hurdle in preventing him from reconciling with his father, quite a conundrum, don’t you think?

  5. Jairam Sir – I think you should put up the name of the movie now for those readers who have not seen the movie!

    An open-ending in your interpretation – well done sir 🙂

    • @Mahesh, am not going to put up the name of the movie 🙂 And regarding the ending itself, I might just publish an epilogue sometime later 🙂

  6. The turn of events is very interesting. But I wonder if it had to end here. But again, if it didn’t end here, it would have been preachy I think. Good one Jairam.

  7. So I came back and read the remaining parts including the first one. The story was riveting. The dilemma was brought out so well. I loved the open ending. Though a doctor must do his duty first but we all are also human at the end of the day. I have no clue which movie this was based on but loved your narration. Great job, Jairam.

    • @ashreyamom, yes it was a Malayalam movie, but I have modified it more than quite a bit, and the movie had an ending whereas I left it open ended 🙂

  8. I couldn’t make out which movie it was given that my memory about movies is too short-lived. But your narration throughout was just wonderful. Every single emotion, every single detail was well presented. It’s a pleasure seeing you evolve as a writer, Jai. More and more power to you. 🙂

    • @Reks, thank you so much, for somebody who has been following my blog for quite a while now and has seen the subtle changes in my posts, these words mean quite a bit, thanks 🙂

  9. I enjoyed the twists and turns .. I do want to know what Ravi does!
    Such a strange and twisted place to be in for him…

    Nicely done Jairam! All 6 parts were a gripping read! 🙂

    • @pixie, glad that you enjoyed the story so far, you are surely going to enjoy the epilogue that has been guest authored by a common friend of ours. The epilogue will be posted sometime in the next 10 odd mins …

  10. Good story, Jairam. (Not sure why you broke it up into six parts. I feel it would have been more impactful as a single read because it wasn’t very long).
    I did have one issue with it, given that you said it was based on a movie. I kept waiting for a sexy heroine to emerge in the story, but she never did! 😛

    • @Rickie, I somehow cannot bring myself to write a post longer than 1200 words at most, and that’s the reason I kind of broke it up into parts 🙂 And this way, readers keep coming back to read the story more often than not 🙂

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